By the way...Very Good. I knew I forgot to mention that before. Also, make sure you post links to all your articles. Im sure we all would love to read them. Keep up the good work!! :geauxtige
Not bad overall. My only question is in your second article you mentioned, in the first paragraph, that Green is well under 6' feet. Then in the second paragraph you list him at 5'10", 5'10" isn't well under six feet. It's a small nitpick, but it just seems like an odd choice of wording.
he's really 5'9. That was the editors mistake! And I just write what they tell me to, and I have no control over the pictures on the articles. The problem with the system is that most of the photography people know nothing about sports, so they often link the wrong people to articles and such. And I had other words like "he added" "he believes", etc... but like one other poster noted, you are supposed to wear out "said" Thanks for the input though. I really do appreciate it. There is no way to know what the reader wants from you, unless you ask.
When I interviewed him, he actually said he thought he was in line to be the starter. But a broken thumb later, things changed. I still think he can be a 5th DB on the team, though. But do you waste a full season for a 5th DB? We'll see, I guess
Well done. I have only one suggestion. The article said: After fielding one of the Southeastern Conference's top statistical units last season, LSU's special teams opens the season with many questions to answer. One question the coaching staff said it would like answered is who will replace Skyler Green, the Tigers' leading punt and kick returner for the past three seasons. I think it would be less redundant to say: After fielding one of the Southeastern Conference's top statistical units last season, LSU's special teams opens the season with many questions to answer. One is who will replace Skyler Green, the Tigers' leading punt and kick returner for the past three seasons?
plus i would have said "special teams open", not "special teams opens". i don't like the subject-verb agreement there, i consider "special teams" to be a plural in that context, and plural subjects need plural verbs. one guy eats two guys eat special teams open the season. i know that in certain contexts you could use "special teams" as an aspect of the game, like a singular, not meaning a plural bunch of teams kicking and punting and returning and whatnot. but in your sentence i read it plural so i would like a plural verb. just my 2 cents.
I know it grates the nerves but special teams is singular in a football context. Just say unit to yourself after special teams and it should go down a lot easier.:wink:
